Revision Flow

It’s Monday. Not Sunday. I want food. I don’t want to do my math homework. Homework? English. English Homework? Whoops.

Okay, I am late. I know you are deeply disappointed for not reading one of my amazing blogs. Sorry!

So “last week’s blog” I am going to focus on our Literacy Narrative Revision ~flow chart~ things. So here is a picture of my first draft:

I started out with a flashback, confused, worried. Why did this happen? What did I do? My first paragraph was negative and kind of sad and boring to read. In my 3^rd paragraph, I decided to investiage. What are some of the things I did? Ah I see. Added that to my paper. With all the negatives in my paper, I decided my 4^th paragraph should be a little positive and mention Oreo’s…at least once. And with my conclusion, I came to a conclusion obviously and asked myself what I could of done better, and was it all on me, or my teacher.

AlTeRnAtE mEtHoD

So what if I saw what I did first? What if that made me thing of the ghost from Christmas past? I could return to the negative thoughts here. Hmm interesting, Hey, I’m not all that bad. I don’t suck at everything. J Bust out Sherlock Holmes. I can save my investigating till the end and proposed changes that could have been made.